Job hunting: We review 10 REAL cover letters!

Sent: Wednesday, December 02, 2009 12:54 PM
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Subject: Regarding Advisor/ Counsellors/ Experts that you need. Dear Sir / Madam,

I have attached my detailed profile with this mail. I wish to be a part of your team to help to the limit that I can. Please revert and acknowledge the receipt of the mail.
 

Preferablly do not use hyperbole. The words revert and acknowledge mean the same. Never address Sir/Madam, if you can help it.

Sent: Friday, December 11, 2009 12:25 PM
To:
Subject: Resume regarding job  

Hi Ceo,
I am XXX done my B-Tech and having 2-3 years of experience.
Please find attached my resume and do let me know for various openings.

Be precise. 2-3 years of experience sounds casual. And the writer  messes it further by saying “various openings”. Shows you are disinterested. This is a sure reject.

Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 7:49 PM
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Subject: ARE YOU THE BEST CARRER COUNSELLOR

IM AM XXX, AGED 50 YEAR, EXPERIENCE IN TEACHING OF HIGHER AND PROFESSIONAL CLASSES WITH ACADEMIC AND VOCATIONAL (FROM CLASS IX)

This is a good example of how not to write a covering letter. Writing in capitals alone is a sure ’no-no.’ Use grammatically correct language in sentence case.
 

Sent: Saturday, January 02, 2010 8:57 PM
To:
Subject: i wanna work Sir,
I have completed my graduation i the year 2009 and i wanna be a part of your advisory team, as i would be one would represent our ideas and thoughts.This is why i wanna be a part of your team.Hope u'll select me

The language is very casual. The candidate’s sincerity stands exposed. The careless use of  English language and spelling mistakes makes it a terrible bore.

Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 12:25 PM
To:
Subject: interested to explore possiblities of working - cv attached 

Subject: Interested to explore possibilities of working, reference the notice in TOI, dated 4th Nov 2009
I am pleased to attach my cv for perusal and shall be happy to discuss further possibilities of working with your esteemed organisation.

You can never be pleased to attach your CV. The company must be pleased to receive the same. The tone of the letter is too patronising. It communicates a sense of misplaced confidence. The introduction line is too verbose. Do not repeat subject line in emails.
No employer will be ready to recruit a person with such a casual approach.

Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 8:48 AM
To:
Subject: Fwd: resume  

- Forwarded message -From:
Date: Sep 30, 2009 4:24 PM
Subject: Fwd: resume
To:

- Forwarded message -From:
Date: Sun, May 24, 2009 at 9:03 AM
Subject: reume
To:

This is the worst mistake one can do while applying for a job. The candidate forwarded his previous application to the current position. A sure way to be rejected. The  correct approach will be to re-write the earlier applications to suit the present job opening.

Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 5:07 PM
To:
Subject: CAREER COUNSELLAR  

Dear Sir/Madame
It refers to advt. published in TOI regarding above mentioned subject.I am interested in your offer.I have attached my profile along with this.

Do not write in clipped sentences. Mention clearly the reason why you are applying. “Above mentioned post” is a very old world and cliched expression, it is better that you don’t use it. “I am interested in your offer” is a presumptuous statement. You attach  a CV or a résumé . ’My profile’ has a social media tinge. Best avoided.

Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 11:06 AM
To:
Subject: Application for the post of Counsellors  

Dear sir,
             pls. find my c.v. enclsoed in
resposne to your advertisment.
i am from a pour background. sir please give me chance.
i have passed school from hosiarpur panjab. from rural bacground sir.
i request you to very kindly consider my application for any suitable position.

Do not speak about your personal circumstances. It immediately diverts the recruiter’s attention.
Giving unnecessary information about your school education is irrelevant. It clearly appears that the last line is a ’cut, copy, paste’ job. It is a giveaway that the application is doctored. 

Sent: Friday, November 06, 2009 4:47 PM
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Subject: Application for Marketing Executive

Dear Sir ,
This is with reference to your Advt in Times of India dated 4th November 2009.
I am a postgraduate with MPhil, both of them with distinction and also served as Senior Research Fellow in University of Delhi.
I am  interested in joining your organization.
I am also enclosing my CV for your kind consideration, Kindly consider my application.

This application has a good opening, briefly explains the candidate’s credentials, expresses interest and closes with a request. The only problem is that the candidate has applied for a marketing posiiton, which is not backed by any professional qualification or experience. So getting a look-in seems remote.

Sent: Thursday, November 05, 2009 1:10 PM
To:
Subject:

Sir ,
My name is dinesh kumar. i am science graduate and i did MCA later on . i am attaching my résumé with my all of the career apportunities .if you have a career for me please , consult me .

This looks like a ploy to distract the employer so that the candidate  doesn’t get any call letter. Write the letter in a standard format. Avoid bad English, wrong punctuation and incorrect spelling mistakes. Use capitals, where ever necessary. Do not use worlds like “consult me”.